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Stars - Thoughts

Today, I am posting my first Haiku. I tried a lot earlier, but was worried, I can write or not! My friend Leo, who is a great poet and whose Haiku are really great and who blogs at I rhyme Without Reason, motivated me a lot, guided about Haiku in actually haiku on twitter (our virtual classroom, pleasant pleasant it is). My friend Saravana, another great poet, blogs at Few Miles also guided and motivated me a lot and my sister and my inspiration, ideal blogger Arti, of course My Yatra Diary author Arti also motivated me and finally, here it is, ohh How can I forget my little guide my sister Simran - whose blog is My Friendship !

You may think, such a slow student I am.....but yes I can't say, why I was so worried about Haiku. But anyway, I can now!  

Thinking about Haiku, I was looking at the sky as usual, I love the darkness and brightness both, usually when I get depressed, I get motivated by my own thoughts, in the worst situations of life I try to find, something good, some hope. These little positive thoughts may not completely remove the depression, but they surely help to start some work in the worst situation. So, I feel them, like stars, though stars do not end the night, do not end the darkness, even they are surrounded by the shadows of darkness, within the darkness, the black. But these little bright stars are enough to show, some path, they are enough to show the existence of life, they are enough to show some hope, some hope of tomorrow.....This haiku compares thoughts and stars.

Twinkling In Darkness
Shadows of Sadness in Mind
Little Stars – Bright Thoughts

28 comments:

  1. Wow! That was such a good attempt! :) Still don't know to write a haiku :(
    The Butterfly Effect

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  2. Namaste Jennifer! Welcome to Gurukripa and thank you so much for the instant response and heart on Indiblogger too.  Haiku is very easy, as now I feel. I was confused to syllable count and with the help of one site, done that 5-7-5 form. :) Leo is perfect with haiku.

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  3. sweet attempt... well done Mohinee... Hoping to read more from your pen...

    Someone is Special

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  4. I am so happy to see the determination in you ... :)
    And I must say you did a great job in your very first attempt !
    Great !
    I love stars and their gleam that enlightens the darkness of sky..
    Beautifully done... Keep writing many more :) 

    Much love to you my lovely Mohu .. 
    Stay happy always!

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  5. Now your haiku is definitely on demand, dearest Mohinee! :) It is a perfect 5-7-5.. the twinkling of the stars take away the shadows of sadness with their bright thoughts, very true! Loved it. 

    This is my site for haiku: http://haiku-heights.blogspot.com/ where each Saturday, I give a topic for a haiku. In April, poetic month, I'll be giving one each day. Do write whenever you can. SiS and Sims already know the site.

    Indiblogger doesn't accept community sites like this :) So they had rejected.  Hope to see you there.

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  6. Superb, superb! Doesn't look like this is your first attempt! Kudos, so very well written just like your poems.. positive, sensitive and inspirational! This resonates in the deep chambers of my heart as well. You definitely should write more and more of these. Looking forward to many more of haiku reads from you :)

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  7. Award for you at.. 
    http://myfriendshipsimran.blogspot.in/2012/03/awards-honor-and-tag.html :)

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  8. Lovely! the first haiku you wrote is full of bright thoughts. i wish to read more of them because i love reading haiku. twinkling stars give us light to look beyond the dark and enlighten our path of wisdom. touches our soul with all it's white light. your three lines said it all in depth.

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  9. Excellent one Mohinee...its wonderful...
    "little Stars...Bright Thought"...loved it... :)
    Cyno...

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  10. excellent----you are already an expert.

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  11. Thank you so much Sis..:).

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  12. Thank you Deepak Sir...:)

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  13. Thank you so much Love you sweet Simran..:)

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  14. Leo, thank you so much, finally I did homework. I saw the haiku heights yesterday. And I think I have seen it earlier too. But I didn't know how to manage this 5-7-5. Now, I got some depth of it. Thank you so much for the motivation. Though I am so slow, I didn't have some relaxed time earlier. But done it now...:) I will join haiku heights...:) It will be honor for me.

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  15. Arti! Thank you soooooo much. You bring confidence always. I did attempted earlier too, but that was not perfect. This was 5-7-5 perfect. So I didn't publish. I had some haiku on friends.

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  16. Wow, that's the wonderful news. Thank you so much Sweetie...:) You really made me feel special.

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  17. Sancheeta Didi, it's so nice to see you loved this. Your poems are always with precise words and depth. I am really happy you loved this one.

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  18. Cynosureji, Welcome to Gurukripa. Thank you so much for your response. Thanks for following too.

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  19. Induji, thank you so much....:). Expert! wow that's really title..:)

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  20. Personally I find Haiku very difficult so am in awe of everyone who makes them beautiful, like the one above.

    loved it.

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  21. Kajal! Thank you so much :). I used to find it very difficult too.

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  22. This is so awesome Mohi Dii :).
    You call this first attempt? :O Seems like the work of an expert :D :).
    It is so lovely :).
    You better start posting Haiku frequently now :D :D.
    Your youngest fan here :"> :D :D

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  23. May that kindly star lead you to Divine light! Amen!
    -Portia

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  24.  That is so sweet..:)

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  25.  Wow Poo, you loved it? :) :) :) Replying you I remember all the smilyes in the world :D.  My youngest fan or sister ? <3. I will post more, and more Haiku. :). So sweet you are following here.

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  26. Yes na Dii :D.Its too good :) :).
    Hehehe :D nice ;) :D. Finally making you remember smileys ;) :D :P.
    Both na :"> :D <3 <3 <3 Your Youngest Fan and Sister :) <3 :D.
    So sweet of you :* Muahx :* <3

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  27. So many smileys..so sweet sweet..I can only say this..:) <3 :) :* :) <3

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